Picture Credit: Courtesy of Tess' MagpieRotation
Trusted metal piece
Subjected to wear and tear
Change the timing chain
And none the wiser
Car engines don’t bother me
As long as it runs
Haikus Inspired by Willow's Magpie #76
Picture Credit: Courtesy of Tess' Magpie
Interesting take... love where you have gone with this one.
ReplyDeleteha. yeah i dont mind as long as it runs either...break down and ask me to fix it we will be in trouble...lol
ReplyDeleteSeen as one double haiku or as two, equally effective - and affective. Fine post.
ReplyDeleteShort but the message is evident to see,
ReplyDeleteHave a good day.
Yvonne.
Both good takes on the pic :)
ReplyDeletehaha...This is very nice and it is so much me in it!
ReplyDelete..omit the 'A' in the first line to remove the excess count of syllables in your Haiku.. anyhow.. with or without it doesn't actually reduce the power you raised in your Haikus.. i like 'em both but my vote goes to the first one... not because of the 'A' but rather the allegorical meaning you hid inside those very lines.. exquisite!(:
ReplyDeleteBrightest blessings!
~Kelvin
Nice and to the point. I like where you went with the prompt.
ReplyDeleteas long as it runs
ReplyDeletebeautiful poem
'change the timing chain' .. applies to so much more than auto engines. I enjoyed this!!
ReplyDeleteLOL, my sentiments exactly. Nice.
ReplyDeleteMade me laugh. Haiku seldom does that to me. Good work!
ReplyDelete— K
Kay, Alberta, Canada
An Unfittie's Guide to Adventurous Travel
I agree about car engines! As long as it runs when I turn the key, that is sufficient!
ReplyDeleteThey don't bother me, either, if they run.
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