Sunday, June 3, 2012

Micro Fiction


Image: Courtesy of Grandma's  Goulash

We're drifting
Sun is setting
There's no anchor
What to conquer?
The sea is vast
We'll not last
No water no food
It's not good

We're dead!


(140 characters)
As counted through Design 215

Note: Grandma's provided a picture (above) and a word conquer for us to write a Micro Fiction not exceeding 140 characters

Written for Grandma's Goulash Succinctly Yours Week 63 and Real Toads OpenLinkMonday

20 comments:

  1. So hard to tell a story with so few words. Well done.

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  2. Ut oh.... well done with so few words :)

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  3. Ah well. Worse things happen at sea. Oh wait...

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  4. smiles....in trouble at this point...and this makes for a cool metaphor as well...

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  5. You got to the essence of the story. No mean achievement, that! Well done.

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  6. Well done. Beautifully succinct. Still ponder doing a limerick in 140 characters but it seldom gets there unless I cheat and say that the spaces are not characters.

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  7. so complete...or is it? I don't know, could be a cliff hanger (or endless sea) for more tiny writes each their own neat little package.

    well done!

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  8. Hence the saying, "Dead in the water."

    Wonderful micro-fiction story, Hank. I am glad you started doing them. They are an easy, short post. I.e. not real time consumeing.
    ..

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  9. Time to swim for it
    Or maybe have a real fit
    And eat one another as well
    Hmmm that would not be swell

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  10. You've done well with so few words:)

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  11. A succinct tragedy. Awesome! I really liked your slant on the photo.

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  12. I can only say, don't set sail without your rations. Enjoyed this, Hank--and agree, there are some things that we will never conquer.

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  13. Nice micro fiction ~ I hate to be stuck at the middle of the sea though ~

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  14. A story in such few words..You painted it with such vision.

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  15. The novel I'm currently reading had a collapse-at-sea theme. What is in today's air? High winds, I suppose.

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  16. Damn, I want more...
    Well done, but I want more... ;D

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  17. Talk about getting to the point. Really cool concept with the micro fiction, and great execution. Loved it.

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  18. Very well done, Hank. A whole story there for sure.
    K

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  19. I can't help but smile... the delivery is wonderful.

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