Saturday, October 6, 2012

Fragile

Abundance of sorts
Intruding into his mind
Paltry in substance

Tugged at his conscience
Recalcitrant in nature
Could he overcome?

Fragile and wrinkled
Fabric of feeble facade
A scarecrow of self

Sought  for divine help
Offered strength of character
Had hopes of success

Written for Chev's Carpe Diem #7 with prompt -fragile-  Poetry Pantry #118 and One Single Impression's #241-scarecrow-

26 comments:

  1. Great words. We're best when we strive.

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  2. You are amazing, Hank.. Great piece!

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  3. Awesome series of haiku Hank. Very evocative. The third touches me the most. Thank you for sharing and being part in Carpe Diem.

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  4. A good progression. Wonderful story.

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  5. Great crafting. You've done excellently well with the given words.

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  6. Great!! This is expressing the whole story.



    Sayantini Bhattacharya
    another part of me

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  7. Masterful use of those words, Hank!

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  8. Hope indeed can get one through
    When stuck and wasting away from view

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  9. Well said, Hank. Love the hopefulness of the ending, and the strength of character.

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  10. Well said, Hank. Love the hopefulness of the ending, and the strength of character.

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  11. nice progressive haiku..amazing!!

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  12. I really like the line "a scarecrow of self" very nice

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  13. nice...really nice hank...i like the progression in this...i like the turn to positive and hope there in the end...hope you had a great weekend man...

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  15. insightful interesting piece !!

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  16. "Hopes of success" - loved it !!!

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  17. The third stanza really grabbed me--really a well written piece

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  18. I always enjoy seeing what poets do with prompts... this is great...

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  19. Great set of haiku. I especially liked the third one. It speaks loudly.

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  20. Nice write, Hank! We have a song, old now, that came to mind:

    "High Hopes lyrics

    Next time you're found, with your chin on the ground
    There a lot to be learned, so look around

    Just what makes that little old ant
    Think he'll move that rubber tree plant
    Anyone knows an ant, can't
    Move a rubber tree plant

    But he's got high hopes, he's got high hopes
    He's got high apple pie, in the sky
    ... "

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  21. Love that fabric of feeble facade. Excellent use of the prompt words!

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  22. This story leaves me hanging. Somehow, I think it isn't finished yet. It's not yet time to say, "The end."

    Fragile

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  23. "Recalcitrant" and "paltry" in one piece...fantastic word choice. I admire vocabulary.

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  24. Hank, what a complicated character you have created here. I agree with Jack about the vocabulary in this. Your character seems to have found more strength by the end. And man, do I love a happy ending. Peace, and thanks for supportive words during my week in Computer Hell! Amy
    http://sharplittlepencil.com/2012/10/09/psych-ward-visitor/

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