Tuesday, October 18, 2016

an air of likely pride - Soliloquy No Renga

                                                                                         Attribution: Mightyhansa
Image: Autumn Leaves (here)

"Soliloquy No Renga" (a 10-stanza renga)

1.There is an opening verse, a hokku and a closing verse an ageku. 
There has to be a link or an association back to this hokku from the ageku  -  Chev
2. In each stanza there are pairs of homophones

the hokku 
wind blown from autumn trees
a stream of gold
                          -  © Jane Reichhold

                        leaves floating way down weighed by
lightness but of gravity
air of likely pride
to stake a claim of power
heir to Mother Earth
     central to lang of the Scots
        bathing length of forest floor

bare of intentions
likely to bear some pressure
meeting it head-on
    better to be prepared where
        calm persons wear wily smiles

plain thoughts putting brakes
break the silence of warm nights
rise to even plane
   four in peaceful contention
    well for season's innocence 

midnight sun pray be
insisting to be seen still
prey to lame requests                                                           the ageku
                                                            stream of golden fare
                                                            a fair share of Autumn winds

For Lillian's at d'Verse's  - homophone me
Chev's Carpe Diem  -   Universal Jane #3 river song


  1. Good use of homophones here. :) I would enjoy the poem as a poem more if they weren't italicized. Just my opinion.

  2. Very very interesting form!! Thanks so much for combining it with the homophones. Especially liked the wear/where stanza. Well done!

  3. This is a great use of the homphones, though I do prefer them not being obvious... (bold).

    1. Got it! Both De and your goodself expressed same. Thanks for the tip De and Bjorn!


  4. Very interesting to combine the two!

  5. I had to search the meaning of 'homophones', but as I now understand them ... than you did an awesome job on this Soliloquy no Renga Hank

  6. This is a great use of homophones.


  7. Nice spin on the two, many a lame request can always come due, whether from man or nature.

  8. This is absolutely inspiring, Hank :D

  9. I've never heard of this style before. A riveting read.

  10. This is so well done. The use of the homophones doesn't distract at all from the beauty of the poem.