Tuesday, October 1, 2013

An Eclipse to Outshine

                                                                                          Attribution: Bree
Image: Eclipse Glasses
Source: Wikimedia Commons (here)

As when the Sun, new risen,
Looks through the horizontal misty air,
Shorn of his beams, or from behind the Moon,
In dim eclipse, disastrous twilight sheds
On half the nations, and with fear of change
perplexes monarchs                                        -  John Milton's Paradise Lost

We are to write a haiku or haiku set from a distillation of the above excerpt:

Tries hard to impose
Hidden in shadowy form
The sun bids its place

An eclipse takes form
Envelops half the world to
submission meekly

Written for Chev's Distillation #3 and shared with Claudia's hosting
d'Verse OpenLinkNight week #116


16 comments:

  1. I think you succeeded in your goal.>KB

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  2. Totally cool. I like this distillation you have done.

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  3. Great distillation... and :-)

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  4. Perfection, Hank!! Just perfection.

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  5. like your previous eclipse poem, the sun disappearing can be a fearful thing....facing a world without the light.....

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  6. Foreboding true to the spirit of the other genius:-)


    Aloha

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  7. Hank, always like what I read here...

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  8. Tough challenge ~ Enjoyed your response Hank ~

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  9. Can be scary indeed as the world watches on

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  10. I saw how you got inspired by Milton ... brilliant haiku !!!

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  11. Very nice. Must have been hard to do

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  12. You did a great job with these. My favorite is the second one, though I like the first too.

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