Sunday, December 4, 2016

Swept off the ground shocked

                                                                                         Attribution: Guérin Nicolas
Image: A Hot Kiss (here)

Night to discover
Reminiscent of surprise
Swept off the ground shocked
Sudden hug out of the blue
Uncharitable first kiss

For Chev's tanka at Carpe Diem #1085  -  the kiss 
Elizabeth's Creativity Challenge Day 14  -  hug
Mary's at PU's Poetry Pantry #331

24 comments:

  1. I wish my first kiss had been that hot.

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  2. What lovely words Hank. I remember my first kiss though many years ago. something that is always etched in one's mind.
    Yvonne.

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  3. The uncharitable part surprised me.

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  4. I remember the shock. I was 13, and my father interrupted. The boy came back the next evening and asked if I'd teach his best friend. That was the uncharitable, lol.

    Elizabeth

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    1. Lol! Young minds, how they work. That's funny. But I just know it wasn't then:)

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  5. The uncharitable part seemed like a twist..

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  6. uncharitable - is the kiss unwanted? I love the bird picture.

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  7. The first kiss... I still remember the tingle... when I close my eyes I can feel the warmth of her lips.

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  8. Ha, you reminded me of my first kiss - at the pinnacle moment my mom turned on the porch light and opened the door and we both froze, thinking we had been struck by lightning. I dont think any other kiss ever matched it. LOL.

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  9. Swept up and hopefully still kissing away

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  10. Ha...sometimes 'uncharitable' is the way it was the very first time!! Hopefully, in time it is better.

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  11. I liked the hug, but I don't know about the "uncharitable" kiss. I think in the realm of the senses, being startled is mighty scary.

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  12. This delightful and brought a smile. Thanks Hank.

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  13. I think mine was uncharitable as well--Loved this Hank!

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  14. I took the 'uncharitable' to mean that it was not an act of pity but desire.

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  15. You brought back memories of my first kiss - so awkward it really was uncharitable.

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  16. This is a lovely poem. Made me smile :)

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  17. How the first kiss and relationship can feel uncharitable when dumped for the first time.

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  18. On my first kiss i felt that my tongue stayed hanging out after the kiss. I remember wondering what all the fus was about, lol! A nice write:)

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