Tuesday, November 5, 2013

Salvation fulfilled

                                                                                               Attribution: I EIC
Image  Awareness
Source: Wikimedia Commons (here)

life completes circle
at the end of the journey
death draws the last line      -    Sara McNulty
Repent mere mortals for a
second chance never did come

life completes circle
at the end of the journey
death draws the last line       -    Sara McNulty
awareness likely option
towards salvation fulfilled

Written for Chev's CARPE DIEM Tan Renga Month #5 with Sara's
life completes circle and Grace's hosting at d'Verse OpenLinkNight Week 121

20 comments:

  1. i always hope that i'm well prepared when life completes the circle and death draws the last line...there are days i think it would be wonderful to be home finally..

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  2. The question of eternity looms, doesn't it?

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  3. i like what you added to the second one...the awareness or consciousness of death propelling us to live, hopefully

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  4. prefer the second one, extended into ashift of hope


    much love...

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  5. Have to be aware as at some point we'll all get there

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  6. Wonderful contrast created.. the first one is my favourite...

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  7. Wonderful ... both are so in balance with the first stanza ... great!

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  8. Life's complete circle where death draws the last line..very true words my friend.

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  9. circle game, round and round


    ALOHA from Honolulu
    Comfort Spiral
    =^..^= <3
    > < } } ( ° >
    > < 3 3 3 ( ' >

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  10. Yes, the circle continues...I like drawing the line..we all must march to this tune!

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  11. It doesn't seem like you need a second chance to me.

    as we were before our birth

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  12. both your offering makes for a good meditation session - thank you!

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  13. Hank, your "comments" on Sara's poem couple well with your comments on my peace poem. Salvation while there is war? No way. It's up to all of us.

    This is a combination of two poets, both capable of grace and insight. Thanks so much, Hank. Peace, Amelita

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  14. Enjoyed how you worked these together. And, yes. I agree that awareness is where we find wholeness.

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  15. Love your endings, particularly the first one!

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