Sunday, January 20, 2013

Bliss


Image: Courtesy of Tess' Mag

The world whirled slowly by
Medley of forms and activities
Some accepted some on the sly
And many others of mediocrity

Many who planned to procure
Executed them with perfection
But some just failed to endure
Unashamedly await for salvation

Oblivious to what transpired
The outside world was no bother
Adhering to whims and desires
Young couples aligned their rudder

In a world of their own venture
Holding hands, pitching a wish
Time stood still pristine in nature
Have we elders not savored such bliss?

Written for Tess' Magpie Tales # 152 and Open Link Monday at Real Toads

25 comments:

  1. it is nice to see those that make it, despite what goes on around them in the world...

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  2. Though in the months, perhaps some years ahead economically things aren't going to be that rosy. Thanks Brian!

    Hank

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  3. It so reminds me of the old saying, and song, Love will keep us together!

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  4. really nice lines in here Hank, each stanza has a really nice idea/image to reflect on. Great write. Thanks

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  5. Pleasing and engaging. Thanks.

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  6. Yes...good to remember that young and innocent love!
    Well said
    Hugs
    SueAnn

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  7. Yeah things can sure happen that cause alot of grief, but wonderful when one can pull through.

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  8. Well... I am an elder and I have!
    I quite enjoyed the cadence and flow of this piece. Your rhyme sceme is effective and uncontrived. A strong write.

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  9. beautiful Hank, just beautiful.

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  10. Very beautifully rendered Hank, loved the message !!!

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  11. Yes, I have savored such bliss.

    And sometimes, we manage to recapture it.

    ;)

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  12. Always wisdom to ponder in your work, Hank! Thanks!

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  13. This elder has savored bliss ... the bliss you wrote of so beautifully.

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  14. There is something wonderful about the simple act of holding hands. Well expressed here, Hank!

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  15. So lovely...the act of holding hands can transfer such joy and love...you made it so beautiful

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  16. This is my favorite part:

    "Time stood still pristine in nature
    Have we elders not savored such bliss"

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  17. Well crafted, this. Good strong stanzas.

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  18. Oh, we have and we still do savor them. :) Beautiful.

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  19. I also love the last two lines, Hank.

    Hoping you and your family are well...
    K

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  20. Unashamedly wait for salvation...powerful...grabbed me...

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