Wednesday, May 30, 2012

Make a Wish


Image:1 Courtesy of Google images

‘Make a wish’, quickly!
Only when one is lucky
To spot the tailings..


A Shooting Star

In the still of the night
A light breeze lazily passes by
Brushing my  cheeks lightly
A wisp of my hair flailing on top
What can be more peaceful
Looking up the night sky
As if in collusion bids a common stance
All quiet nothing disturbs
Except for the slight movements
Of rustling leaves on the quiet
Suddenly, ‘ make a wish, make a wish’
Excitement fills the air
From around me, some distance away
Camouflaged by the shadows
Young lovers warm in embrace
Alive in an instance
Aware of nature’s sudden entrance
Long tailings bright in the silent night
A ‘shooting star’ for all its glory!

Submitted for Chev's Haikublog Tackle it Tuesday with prompt - shooting stars

12 comments:

  1. The embrace I would take
    A wish though I may or may not make
    As it is a nice thought
    But a I think it's a bit of fluff by a whole lot
    And first
    With my burst.

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  2. The embrace I would take
    A wish though I may or may not make
    As it is a nice thought
    But a I think it's a bit of fluff by a whole lot
    And first
    With my burst.

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  3. Nice post Pare...

    Made my wish: a wonderful weekend in Wash DC... Going there this Fri til sun... Yohoo!..

    Pareng JJ

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  4. hank this is beautiful verse....love all the texture in it...and the bit of magic in a shooting star as well...seriously this is a fav of yours...

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  5. Hmm I read into this in the end that the shape of the shooting star to be very sperm like and well the young loves rustling in bushes and all. Any way, I don't know if you meant to do that but I liked it...great poem!!

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  6. Pat
    You're first!
    And you can make a wish
    To fulfill a thirst
    Luck on a golden dish

    PareJJ
    It'll be fun. Try not to miss the changing of guards

    Brian
    Thanks.A haiku is too sketchy I thought so included a free verse as support

    Hannah
    Didn't think that way at first. But it appears amazingly ok with your explanation


    Hank

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  7. Love this one Hank, the way you have broadened the thought and made it more inclusive.

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  8. Hank, I like that first one, the haiku. It stands to reason that IF one is lucky he will have to catch the shooting star with a tailing. When the tailing is gone, the 'star' goes out.

    An aside, when shooting stars are forecast I generally try to see them. The last time I tried I saw about four in my half hour. Most times I can't even see them.
    ..
    I like the two meme's that I do together. There is a small number of participants so I most of the time can return all my comments.
    There is a third Thursday meme I do, also posted now, going Through the Alphabet with Jenny. Today was the "B" word.
    ..

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  9. Oh, I love making a wish :)
    Lovely visuals Hank.

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  10. I have made a wish! That "Tackle It Tuesday" will become a success. I think that wish has come true.
    I am glad to see your entry Kaykuala thank you for sharing.

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  11. Shall we wish this then
    on the star; bring us more luck
    to sight you often

    :)

    Lovely haiku of yours, Hank!

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