Thursday, June 18, 2020

putting weight on sane lips

                                                                                             Author: Alvin Mahmudov
Image: Slow dancing (here)

the 10 of 12 given words
bruised dancing joints wedding 
music fiddled bar dusty weight lips

bruised ego dancing
in seedy joints to forget
a disappointment

no wedding music
fiddled with the liberal
bar's downing of booze

but to clear dusty 
minds putting weight on sane lips
like dignified souls

MMT's Whirligig #271
Frank's at d'Verse MTB  -  imagism
with haiku

11 comments:

  1. Great images and lines Hank. I liked this one....
    but to clear dusty
    minds putting weight on sane lips

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  2. As always Hank you come up with an excellent verse with meaning.
    Take care.
    Yvonne.

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  3. I can almost hear a song here too which goes so well with the images
    "putting weight on sane lips
    like dignified souls"

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  4. Your haiku evoke a scene of disappointment and coping. Well done!

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  5. no wedding music
    fiddled with .......... I love that play on words.

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  6. I can see this... drowning sorrows, yet finding clarity, as in "to clear dusty / minds"

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  7. You told an entire story in three brief haiku...well done!

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  8. What Lynn said! Liked that last stanza especially.

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  9. Some want a fuss made at their weddings other a low key affair. Usually the groom has to go along with the decision as it appears to be her day!

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  10. There's a slow melancholy dance in these words.

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  11. nice snapshots of real people

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