Thursday, February 4, 2016

Tearful experience

                                                                      Attribution: Joaquim Alves Gaspar
Image: Walking through the Underpass (here)

Sunday Whirligig's 11 of 12 given words:
swaying carrying suitcases envelope fever 
memory scissors sharp hiding cake germs

3WW given words:
tearful unsteady
abrasive (causing damage or wear by rubbing, grinding, or scraping)

There he was alone swaying side to side
a little unsteady Chaplin like
Walking through the dark underpass 
Not carrying anything, no suitcases
nothing except for a camera and a cane

Fear enveloped his mind fever-pitched
But his memory was intact, scissors sharp
He was not hiding nor running away
from anyone. That he prided himself

Tearful, yes but not abrasive enough
to cause concern, perhaps his attire

Yes, perhaps his attire caked with
mud with enough germs to  kill everyone
around him. Unperturbed he soldiered
on, alone and very much ostracized
his identity suspect

He kept reminding himself though
Of immediate concern he had
a cleansing job to do unto himself

Note: Help! Apologies to Sanaa, Colleen and 
Cheryl. Hank's comments could not get through 
at your blogs. May have to use email 

MMT's Sunday's Whirligig #45
Thomg's 3WW # 465
Sumana's at PU's Midweek Motif  -  identity


  1. The ending took me a little by surprise. I like how you manage to incorporate all the given words.

  2. Oops, that's alright Hank. Love your poem :)

  3. The character you've painted in words is vivid!

  4. Ha, this fits the "identity" prompt very loosely, but I do see the word 'identity' in your verse. Smiles.

  5. I wonder about this shadowy figure who needs a cleansing perhaps on the inside and outside as life has taken him through the mud.

  6. the character has the grit to carry on in spite of the muddy obstacles...

  7. The crap one can carry around deserves a good cleanse every now and then, inside and out.

  8. Wonderful as always Hank, it's a real pleasure to read your poetry.

  9. Like the character you found in the words. They do make suggestions we might not otherwise think of.


  10. I love your character study Hank. You manage to give us a look at this man from many angles down to his unbalanced gait.