Saturday, July 16, 2016

Often ends with violence - A Choka

                                                                                                     Author: Paulrfss
Image: Monument commemorating
civilian casualties during WW2 (here)

Choka - comprises 5/7 syllable couplets 
and to end with an extra seven-syllable line

Hate is a portent
element lying dormant

It gleefully waits
To unleash its ugly head

Triggered off with words
Often ends with violence

Once released it will
survive with life of its own

Funny enough that
many find it amusing

It thrives in twisted
minds claiming  a victory

If only they had
to experience the carnage
that they had themselves started

For MLMM's B&P’s Shadorma &
Beyond - to write a choka and
Sanaa's Prompt Nights's - hate’s a 
parasite that rots the soul

9 comments:

  1. Your last stanza says is so well... I wonder how different things would be, if the ones spreading the hate-filled bloodshed had to suffer the devastation they cause, on their own flesh and bones, before they forced on someone else.

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  2. This is such an electrifying poem Hank, indeed hatred sprouts anger which in turn leads to violence and destruction. Beautifully penned. Thank you so much for participating at Prompt Nights and for your constant love and support.

    Lots of love,
    Sanaa

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  3. I think you are right Hank violence often doesn't seem real until we experience it ourselves - let's hope that does not become to wide an experience

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  4. Yep, sure leads the way for an even worse display.

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  5. Survives on its own because it doesn't take much to feed it.

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  6. yes 'if only' that was done it would serve them right...

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  7. I loved the choka and will note it to try myself one of these days....and I adore this poem...wow it leads the reader right to the bitter end of hate....and the scary thing about hate is that it has a life of its own devouring all in its path if we let it...well done!

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  8. It is frankly horrifying to know that people think humor is found in hatred.

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  9. Thank you Hank for this lovely reflection on an aspect of "change" that is often just a return to an earlier point in time and no change at all. Bastet

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