Wednesday, February 15, 2012

Desire

Photo Credit: Google Images

Extending the hand
Create a relationship
A yearning unleashed

Quaint but it is true
Stuck-up immaturity
Creates obstacles

Estranged from the group
A Desire unfulfilled
An ostracized soul

Submitted for Haiku Heights #106 with prompt 'Desire' and d'Verse OpenLinkNight week 31

19 comments:

  1. Desire can be fickle, get what you want and find it isn't what you need, or very well could be.

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  2. Loving the first lines especially, Hank. Immaturity and posing are the killers of sincerity and connection.

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  3. i whole-heartedly agree with what hedge said above..

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  4. If you can't be yourself, you won't be any good at being who you aren't. Nice write!
    http://charleslmashburn.wordpress.com/2012/02/14/i-cant-do-this-anymore/

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  5. def a cold feel in this hank...it is a risk any time we extend that hand...sometimes it is warm and others not so much at all....def agree with the above comments as well....

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  6. Loving the first lines.... A good write !

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  7. I love charles' advice. How very true it is. Ah, humans are so complex, aren't they, Hank?

    Pamela

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  8. Wonderful truthful words pareng hank...

    JJRod'z

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  9. We cannot find who we truly are, it seems immersed in an illusion of community. That desire for truth of self caught wonderfully here. For we do seek solidarity with others, it might be our highest purpose, but never at the risk of losing your soul.

    A Desire unfulfilled
    An ostracized soul

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  10. Excellent. These work equally well as individual verses or as one poem. The first one is a real cracker!

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  11. Each haiku reads as a separate chapter that ties together one narrative. Well done.

    Cheers,

    Mark Butkus

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  12. While the hand is warm, people can be so cold. I was ostrasized in high school because I had to walk with a cane (juvenile arthritis in hips, which is now coming back as "grown up" version). These haiku each reflect the urge we all have to connect... thanks, Hank. Amy
    http://sharplittlepencil.wordpress.com/2012/02/13/bobbis-mom-sunday-whirl/

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  13. I like this line :

    An ostracized soul

    Have a good weekend Hank ~

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  14. I find it a very gentle poem, perhaps due to the haiku format. Doesn't really seem to capture the pain and hurt of the topic. Not necessarily a bad thing, of course.

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  15. hank, i got my package...it is proudly hanging on the fridge right now...smiles....

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