Tuesday, February 28, 2012

An Anaphora

Gone!

Gone were the days
Of fun and laughter
Of tumbles and trauma
Gone were the feelings
Of wanting to be an adult
To do adult things
And get rewarded
Gone  were the backyard
That witnessed the tears
Of the childhood experience
And the triumph of
Boyhood strength
Gone were the neighborhood
Whose kids have grown
And flew to new nests
Gone were the houses
Close to your heart
To make way for developers
To enrich themselves
But we still witness
The antics of those vying
For higher office where
Gone were the players of old
Replaced by new ones
Where the game is still the same
Only the players have changed!


Note: In Poetry Jam one is encouraged to create an Anaphora Poem where there is a repetition of a word throughtout. I've chosen the word 'Gone"

41 comments:

  1. bam! way to lay it down hank...yes the game is still the game and just the players have changed...great use of the style poem as well...great use of repetition...

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    1. Thanks Brian! I'm still trying to come to terms with the WV matter. It is as yet to be resolved the way I would want it!

      Hank

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  2. Most great to read Hank.
    With the pleasures of travelling comes the jetlag so please excuse shortness of comment.

    Yvonne.

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    1. No problem! Welcome back, Yvonne!

      Hank

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  3. Great poem. By miles your best yet - of those I've read, anyway. So congratulations and keep it up! I am now going back for another read.

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    1. Thanks Dave! Appreciate it! In fact I had borrowed some parts of your style - no rhymes but just let it move!

      Hank

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  4. So very true that so much of what was good in the past is now gone. But that is the way of the world! The repetition really adds strength, I think, and your ending had maximum impact.

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    1. Thanks Mary! That's the beauty of Anaphora, I suppose!

      Hank

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  5. Yeah everything that was good is gone and that was a pain is still here, just as you say changing up the players, but the game is always the same.

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    1. Yes Pat, The game remains and the rules seldom change! Only the players are different!

      Hank

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  6. awesome lines and great views Pareng Hank!...

    JJRod'z

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  7. The repetition is really well done, and I love the message. Excellent write!

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    1. Thanks MZ! You are always there.

      Hank

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  8. the game is still the same, yessir. playful way you wrote it.

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    1. Yes Ed! Only the players are different. And some got their fingers burnt in the process!

      Hank

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  9. Somethings never change, old life is gone but, life goes on regardless.
    Nicely written Hank.

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    1. That is true! History repeats! No necessity to reinvent the wheel, somebody will do something!

      Hank

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    1. Thanks Sheila and ayala! Appreciate it!

      Hank

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  11. The bulldozers took my childhood neighborhood and it is strange to visit there and see no remnant of those past lives. Glad I could get to your blog--when I first tried last night it said it did not exist! maybe you were working on it.

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    1. Thanks Peggy! The realities of life appeasing development as a good excuse! I was playing around with the WV, on how to go about it. It took me some time. I have still not solved it.

      Hank

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  12. Strong. It evokes anger in me, at the neighborhoods going to the bull dozers. It's happening in my office neighborhood right now and making me nuts. Well done.

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    1. Sadly, that is progress, Victoria! We grit our teeth seething while the cronies make money!

      Hank

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  13. A lovely capture of the changes of life....beautiful writing here! :-)

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  14. Dear Hank,
    It reminds me of the movie "Gone with the wind" starring Clark Gable I think. Great poetry.

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    1. You are right! Starring Clark Gable,Vivien Leigh and Thomas Mitchell. Directed by Victor Fleming based on book written by Magaret Mitchell. It won 8 oscars! - Wiki

      Hank

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  15. Love this, Hank. The single-word repetition worked well, and what more poignant word to use than "gone"? Ending also true and so real. Thanks, Amy

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    1. Thanks Amy! 'Gone' gave a feeling of helplessness which many lament after witnessing what's happening on the ground!

      Hank

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  16. always an awesome experience to read u :)
    I learn a lot from your posts !!

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    1. Thanks Jyoti! Appreciate it very much.

      Hank

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  17. Poignant - and angry making! (Well, at least for me - I'm tired of the antics!)

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  18. This rocked! Totally...love this style and the repetition was spot on. Great stuff.

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