Thursday, November 17, 2011

Limericks 6

These were submitted to Mad Kane's Humor blog at various times as per dates indicated. 

kaykuala says:
November 17, 2011 at 4:54 am

A woman who went through a phase
Of untold pleasure and was amazed
What did she do right
Try as hard as she might
Just couldn’t figure she was better than best

kaykuala says:
November 8, 2011 at 1:00 pm

A fellow was famous worldwide
There was nothing for him to hide
Reputation preceded him
Had not acted on whims
Level headed when skirtchasing  pretty maids

kaykuala says:
October 30, 2011 at 9:41 am

A fellow who just let it slip
He was making out on the last trip
His live-in got to know
And sadly to his horror
She left in a huff without batting an eyelid

11 comments:

  1. Some more great limericks from you
    That much is certainly true
    Oh such fun
    Now I'm done
    And know there will be more to view

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  2. Hey.. loved your writing style in this one :) :)

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  3. Hi Hank—I can tell you're enjoying the limerick form, so maybe I can offer a little tip? If you count the number of beats in a line, and follow the rhyme pattern AABBA, it should work every time. I've written an example (not to be taken seriously). The syllables can be 88558, or 88448, or 99559, etc., as long as they're consistent. The last line can, as a joke, run a lot longer (I haven't done that here, however). Cheers, K

    There once was a young man named Hank
    Who took his pay check to the bank
    The banker said no
    This firm’s in escrow
    And they have their big boss to thank

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  4. Kay,
    It's amazing! You put through a great idea of consistency. There's now a semblance of discipline in the creation. I've a quick 88558 as a test case below but with a rather flat humor. I was trying hard to make it better. Needs more practice looks like! Here goes!

    Mad Kane creates a revolution
    Pat came in right on very strong
    Kay is not outdone
    Hank in lots of fun
    A grouping of like minds is born

    Thanks a lot, Ma'am, for going that extra mile! I'm beginning to see lots of fun in Limericks right now!

    Hank

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  5. This is really, really close, Hank. Just watch the rhyming, AABBA. The first two lines have to rhyme with each other and with the last line.
    Always happy to help, especially as I can see you enjoying the process. If your limericks flow properly, people will find they're memorizing them without even trying.
    K

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  6. Untold pleasure and skirt-chasing -- what fun blog topics. :) :) Then loss and leaving.

    Ahhhh, love and such.

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  7. oo you have to watch what you let slip...haha...fun limericks hank...

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  8. Great laughs. Thoroughly enjoyable.

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  9. i have no idea which form of the poem it is..! interesting and thoughtful!

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  10. Dear Pramoda,
    This is a Limerick. Go to Mad Kane's Humor blog and know more.

    Hank

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  11. Loved the limmericks Hank , wish I could write them, I once knew a man in Ireland who wrote limmerick books,

    Have a good week-end.
    Yvonne.

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