tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1980374748220249244.post5476765845347771775..comments2024-03-18T18:22:15.663-07:00Comments on Rainbow: Completing a 3-line Haikukaykualahttp://www.blogger.com/profile/03240206222973305395noreply@blogger.comBlogger12125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1980374748220249244.post-68741838768833636832013-11-03T12:15:23.857-08:002013-11-03T12:15:23.857-08:003 lovely 3rd lines, espec. the musicals...3 lovely 3rd lines, espec. the musicals...joannehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18255189465024912528noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1980374748220249244.post-62198175075274204382013-11-03T01:26:44.830-07:002013-11-03T01:26:44.830-07:00I like these completed haiku ... every haiku has b...I like these completed haiku ... every haiku has become a gem ...Chèvrefeuillehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00848986700725789154noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1980374748220249244.post-65591542209144781162013-11-02T19:21:59.268-07:002013-11-02T19:21:59.268-07:00Oh, for that music!Oh, for that music!SandyCarlsonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10752798823532580733noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1980374748220249244.post-14100665836417050302013-11-02T18:01:58.020-07:002013-11-02T18:01:58.020-07:00i would def love to be able to hear them...i find ...i would def love to be able to hear them...i find their moans to be quite peaceful....Brian Millerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00722940075884718007noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1980374748220249244.post-4477984044993324082013-11-02T14:27:23.257-07:002013-11-02T14:27:23.257-07:00Good practice for the haiku, Hank. You did good i...Good practice for the haiku, Hank. You did good in the Tankas below too.<br />I use Tanka when a haiku or Senyru won't quite say what I want to say. It adds two more lines.<br />..Jimhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02982249173214655060noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1980374748220249244.post-60384244110026494662013-11-02T12:41:57.592-07:002013-11-02T12:41:57.592-07:00Absolutely Lolly! In fact reading out loud has mor...Absolutely Lolly! In fact reading out loud has more impact. Read the first line and pause for the break. Then read the second and third without a break.It enhances the appreciation. Thanks for emphasizing it Ma'am!<br /><br />Hankkaykualahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03240206222973305395noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1980374748220249244.post-44698893631511747372013-11-02T12:29:27.827-07:002013-11-02T12:29:27.827-07:00I really like the line "in celebration"....I really like the line "in celebration". Good job.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11072969427737313377noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1980374748220249244.post-23746659470691436862013-11-02T12:12:13.969-07:002013-11-02T12:12:13.969-07:00Nicely done! I like how you let line one be the fr...Nicely done! I like how you let line one be the fragment and you allowed the 2nd line to be your phrase. I too found the natural break in this haiku to be at the end of line one. Lollyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16526692343815904632noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1980374748220249244.post-62277291920873799382013-11-02T11:03:27.713-07:002013-11-02T11:03:27.713-07:00Can I have some of that Bliss? Can I have some of that Bliss? LLM Callinghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17199375981896229914noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1980374748220249244.post-55960101997404203722013-11-02T10:49:27.901-07:002013-11-02T10:49:27.901-07:00all 3 were perfect...with that ahhh moment...all 3 were perfect...with that ahhh moment...joannehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18255189465024912528noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1980374748220249244.post-62447703001497240702013-11-02T10:14:34.014-07:002013-11-02T10:14:34.014-07:00It sounds nicely rythmic but I wonder what it desc...It sounds nicely rythmic but I wonder what it describes - hpw ignorant.Al-Manarhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07203360858632549270noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1980374748220249244.post-32471028043213573862013-11-02T08:54:21.244-07:002013-11-02T08:54:21.244-07:00And sure have a fun time with their chimeAnd sure have a fun time with their chimePat Hatthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07745293224202430152noreply@blogger.com